One thing I loved about this is...well I don't want to say lack of detail, but I like how didn't use too MUCH detail. That actually happens to be one of my biggest flaws when it comes to writing. I write epic descriptions, but I never quite know how to make the story progress.
Another thing is that this story once again reminds me of the knowledge humans have an insufficiency of. The man thinks he is doing one tiny act of rebellion, making a small step to peace, be unbeknownst to him he is actually helping take the lives of two small children who simply wish for better lives outside the hell where they dwelled.
Thanks! I definitely agree it's a fine line to walk; I get stuck alternating between too much and too little descriptions too. I'm glad you thought this had the right balance! :)
Also yeah, that's one thing I've always struggled with; the idea that acting as one feels is right in the moment often ends up contrary to what actually IS the right thing to do. We all want peace, but the grand irony is peace is something you have to fight for.
@The Yobanashi Girouette, I agree 100%. I once had a friend tell me, "We need to stop spending money on the military and give it to the homeless people. Then we use the rest to give everybody free healthcare."
@Friday_, This. This right here is a classic example. It "Feels right" in the moment, but if you dig even a centimetre deeper, you realize her idea is beyond terrible; it's actually damaging.
One thing I loved about this is...well I don't want to say lack of detail, but I like how didn't use too MUCH detail. That actually happens to be one of my biggest flaws when it comes to writing. I write epic descriptions, but I never quite know how to make the story progress.
Another thing is that this story once again reminds me of the knowledge humans have an insufficiency of. The man thinks he is doing one tiny act of rebellion, making a small step to peace, be unbeknownst to him he is actually helping take the lives of two small children who simply wish for better lives outside the hell where they dwelled.
Also yeah, that's one thing I've always struggled with; the idea that acting as one feels is right in the moment often ends up contrary to what actually IS the right thing to do. We all want peace, but the grand irony is peace is something you have to fight for.
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Her ignorance blew my mind.
"The problem with closed minded people is that their mouth is always open."
-Anonymous