Your story was truly captivating and held my interest from beginning to end! I was highly impressed by the excellent language you employed, as it made your narrative incredibly descriptive and engrossing. To enhance the clarity of character dialogue in your next story, I recommend using quotation marks ("") whenever a character speaks. While the abundance of plot twists in your story added excitement, it did make it somewhat challenging to follow. To avoid confusion regarding the identity of the killer, perhaps consider incorporating character names and roles at the conclusion of the story. I noticed the presence of two killers in the narrative after multiple readings, suggesting that this aspect could benefit from more clarity. Overall, your story demonstrates a solid foundation, but some refinement would be beneficial if you plan to publish it.