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薑毛辣椒
整篇故事看完之後,並沒有第一句相關的部分呢......
一開始看的時候,想說第一句並沒有與內文接上軌,可能是一個「序」的概念。不過到了最後還是沒有出現第一句帶有的強烈情感,只是兩個小孩在打怪罷了。
這樣實在可惜呢!畢竟這是個不壞的故事,讀起來很輕鬆,就是輕小說的感覺。但這樣不符合題目就不容易賺喜歡了吧?雖然沒有違反規則啦!
2 years ago
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羅衣
寫着寫着就歪了啦 XD 謝謝你的意見喔
2 years ago
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薑毛辣椒
@羅衣
,👍
2 years ago
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薑毛辣椒
字數超過了喔!雖然稍微看一下是不錯的故事,等等再仔細看一次吧!
2 years ago
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羅衣
我都沒有發現字數超了@@ 我待會改改
2 years ago
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薑毛辣椒
@羅衣
,不知道作者大大改了沒唉?因為字數還是超過
2 years ago
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羅衣
@薑毛辣椒
,改了,但實在刪不到很多字,所以我在想要不要保留頭尾句然後砍掉重練,還是直接DQ比較好
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薑毛辣椒
@羅衣
,先試著保留頭尾改吧!取消資格也只是無法領到獎金,文章依舊不能刪,不然接龍會斷掉。
2 years ago
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一開始看的時候,想說第一句並沒有與內文接上軌,可能是一個「序」的概念。不過到了最後還是沒有出現第一句帶有的強烈情感,只是兩個小孩在打怪罷了。
這樣實在可惜呢!畢竟這是個不壞的故事,讀起來很輕鬆,就是輕小說的感覺。但這樣不符合題目就不容易賺喜歡了吧?雖然沒有違反規則啦!