I've read very few stuff in my life that hit me as hard as this one. And damn Andrew, this isn't even an official printed novel. I can proudly say that it is an honor to have read such beautiful work even before it was published. And I will forever talk about this piece especially when it hits the stores or even be turned into a movie.
I've never read anything so real and so emotive. You wrote the scenes with brilliance and grace. I'm feeling a bit emotional right now and reading the first few paragraphs of this chapter hit me in the gut real hard. There is such joy in me that I was able to go through this journey with Puck, Nova and Rick. I haven't even read the last remaining chapters and I already feel like you've succeeded.
The broken 3 word motif was so good and satisfying, I swear. Cause it was like finding the perfect words and it fit the situation at hand. That's just some beautiful device like you set it up for most of the chapters and decide to break it at the very best time cause its the most appropriate thing to do. That just takes a level of genius to pull off.
I'm really proud of you man and I hope more people read this. And I really wish great success for you.
Why, thank you from the bottom of my heart. It people who put the time and energy into encouragement and feedback that keep me going, it really is. Thanks Alef.
Honestly though, Nova's the bae. In my personal opinion. You wrote her in a way that I feel like I'd totally connect with her and buddy up. Now, I don't drink or smoke and all, and I wouldn't encourage it, but her spirit is great! You wrote her... I don't know, as if you actually know her. I wouldn't be shocked if you did base her off a person you know, and if you didn't, damn, what a fine job you've been doing. She reminds me of me, slightly, actually. I'm sad to say I'm not as daring, but I've got two guys who I constantly hang out with. I'm not dating any of them, and neither are gay, but you get what I mean. Some situations are actually pretty scarily close. So, this story connects to my heart in a special way, I'm sure most readers would agree when I say that. You've got a knack for writing, so keep. It. Up!
Great! My intention was to sculpt the characters in a way that anyone who read them could connect to one. Mediators connect to Rick, drag-alongs to Puck, and free spirits to Nova. I'm glad you could find yourself here!
Ok so. If I don't get around to finishing a chapter for my story that you liked tonight, its because I just binge read this WHOLE DARN THING. IN A SITTING. I cranked through a half a bag of chips and two bowls of salsa. Not even kidding. So your character development is FLAWLESS. I feel like I know all three of them so very well and feel very strongly about each of them. Honestly, I love Rick the most. He is a good man, solid, loyal and honest. Seriously, hes like the perfect guy...sans the teenage alcoholism thing, you know. I've known girls just like Nova and they were fun to go out with on a weekend night in college but I kept them at an arms length as far as legitimate friendship went. I feel bad for her but seriously, I just want to slap her sometimes. Way too manipulative for my tastes. And how she flounces around like she thinks shes too cute to boot.... ugh. I want to cuff her and be like, "Stop pretending you're a Kardashian and get it together! You're a reasonable intelligent girl with a healthy body, FULFILL YOUR POTENTIAL and stop being a lush." A seriously well written character. That's probably why she elicits such strong feelings for me. And Puck....poor poor Puck. He's just a whole heap of mess, bless his heart. But he seriously needs to stop whining. So the girl isn't into you the way you want? Too bad. Fish or cut bait, sugar britches. But he's not that bad all the time. He just needs to watch some PSAs on peer pressure. All in all, you need to edit this sucker and get it to a publisher. Seriously. Amazing.
Best. Review. Ever. Thank you so much for giving these three your time! Hopefully I'll have the "complete" first draft out by the end of the week--I'm writing 5-6 hours a night... stay tuned!Seriously, love to read reviews like this. It keeps me going!
I've never read anything so real and so emotive. You wrote the scenes with brilliance and grace. I'm feeling a bit emotional right now and reading the first few paragraphs of this chapter hit me in the gut real hard. There is such joy in me that I was able to go through this journey with Puck, Nova and Rick. I haven't even read the last remaining chapters and I already feel like you've succeeded.
The broken 3 word motif was so good and satisfying, I swear. Cause it was like finding the perfect words and it fit the situation at hand. That's just some beautiful device like you set it up for most of the chapters and decide to break it at the very best time cause its the most appropriate thing to do. That just takes a level of genius to pull off.
I'm really proud of you man and I hope more people read this. And I really wish great success for you.
So your character development is FLAWLESS. I feel like I know all three of them so very well and feel very strongly about each of them. Honestly, I love Rick the most. He is a good man, solid, loyal and honest. Seriously, hes like the perfect guy...sans the teenage alcoholism thing, you know.
I've known girls just like Nova and they were fun to go out with on a weekend night in college but I kept them at an arms length as far as legitimate friendship went. I feel bad for her but seriously, I just want to slap her sometimes. Way too manipulative for my tastes. And how she flounces around like she thinks shes too cute to boot.... ugh. I want to cuff her and be like, "Stop pretending you're a Kardashian and get it together! You're a reasonable intelligent girl with a healthy body, FULFILL YOUR POTENTIAL and stop being a lush." A seriously well written character. That's probably why she elicits such strong feelings for me.
And Puck....poor poor Puck. He's just a whole heap of mess, bless his heart. But he seriously needs to stop whining. So the girl isn't into you the way you want? Too bad. Fish or cut bait, sugar britches. But he's not that bad all the time. He just needs to watch some PSAs on peer pressure.
All in all, you need to edit this sucker and get it to a publisher. Seriously. Amazing.