You ever just listen to music while you read and be like, "Wow, this really fits." https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wbgInLJ81eY - This song right here just made this story so much better in my opinion.
Wow! You really painted envy (at least, I'm assuming that's what you've chosen) in quite the evil light! Then again, they are the seven DEADLY sins. Very good job! Your style has a very intriguing way about it. It made it quite easy to read.
Good work!