I admit the first few paragraphs, I couldn't understand what was going on. It felt like the story expected me to know some things beforehand and if I knew the lore it would have been easier but the way you told the story heavily compensated for my lack of knowledge with it. I have to research more on some terms or power up my context clue detector haha (It would be great if there were for people without any background). I haven't seen other stuff related to this like other commenters have noted. But it does give me that classic RPG game feel wherein it has it's very own world and mythology that does not spoonfeed you every detail but you still understand by going through it. Great work in the details but I would like more world building (I mean it already has but yeah more would be awesome), the characterization of the lead was great, it was spread out and not given in one go.
I kind of like it. It treats its readers as smart. It does not hand everything at once like a tutorial. It expects the readers to know beforehand and be more wary of the details so you can put the pieces together. I usually have lots of trouble reading big fantasy stories (unless they're in games where the visuals are given) but this one did well. So yeah, I expect to know more about the world you created in the coming issues.
This story has an incredibly old Nordic feel to it. The way you created the world, especially towards the beginning has kind of a Vikings (the TV series) mixed with Outlander (the book and TV series) feel to it. I usually tend to fall in and out of interest with stories, but when you have a lull in the chapter, it almost gives the reader a sense of calm instead of boredom. I enjoyed the detail and effort put in, though, as others mentioned, it's very long. Keep up the good work with this! I look forward to reading more!
I really love your story! It's so vibrant, yet dark in a way that makes you stay engaged to the story, Veny in-particular. I also loved your formatting. It is almost exactly 20 mins to read, which is what the average adult reads from a chapter. That also means that you have at least or more than 5000 words for your chapter. I admire your perseverance to continue. I find it quite difficult to make my chapters long, but you've given me motivation. When I finish the second chapter of my story, your skill will be evident on my works! Keep it up!Zealous Feet
I usually hate stuff like this. But this caught my attention. It has a very natural flow though i gave up trying to figure out how to pronounce the characters names. Great descriptions that paint a beautiful picture without being too drawn out. I didnt notice any major errors and its basically perfect. I know some people dont like long descriptions but sometimes i think they are necessary. Plenty of life in the characters. Great job
I kind of like it. It treats its readers as smart. It does not hand everything at once like a tutorial. It expects the readers to know beforehand and be more wary of the details so you can put the pieces together. I usually have lots of trouble reading big fantasy stories (unless they're in games where the visuals are given) but this one did well. So yeah, I expect to know more about the world you created in the coming issues.
I find it quite difficult to make my chapters long, but you've given me motivation. When I finish the second chapter of my story, your skill will be evident on my works!
Keep it up!Zealous Feet