@Akaluv, Thanks for the feedback! I wrote this for NaNoWriMo so I thought it might still be a bit rushed, but I'll keep an eye out for that next time I go over it. Thanks again!
Thanks for responding to me. So, I will say your descriptions were nice in this chapter, but I felt like you telling me the story rather than showing it. Everything was direct and to the point. I hope the feedback helps =)
Thanks for responding to me. So, I will say your descriptions were nice in this chapter, but I felt like you telling me the story rather than showing it. Everything was direct and to the point. I hope the feedback helps =)