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Kitty
'Great Time War'? Reminds me of Doctor Who.
7 years agoReply
ShadowBobcat10
I haven't actually watched Dr. Who, but the "Great Time War" has something to do with people murdering others left and right to gain immortality. I'll probably talk more about it later, too.
7 years agoReply
Lata
Awesome! I loved how you used a Time Catcher to talk about the different types of time killers. And I really like Ms. Rose. She seems like a wonderful killer.
7 years agoReply
ShadowBobcat10
Thank you. There's going to be plenty more of Ms. Rose next chapter (this story's a multi-parter).
7 years agoReply
Lata
@ShadowBobcat10, Yeah, I kinda figured that one out with the title. Belladonna is an excellent name for a killer, really good one.
7 years agoReply
ShadowBobcat10
@Lata, Thank you! Ms. Belladonna is coming up. The characters are based on the main characters of RT's RWBY. Ms. Rose is Ruby and Weiss, while Ms. Belladonna is going to be Blake and Yang.
7 years agoReply
You had some good world building in this chapter. There were a few mistakes, and some sentences were odd, but it's nothing an edit can't fix. I really want to know more about this world. It reminds me of the movie, "Out of Time."
7 years agoReply
ShadowBobcat10
Thank you for telling me about the odd sentences. I'd love it if you could show me with a "suggest edits." Feedback is the thing an author needs most :D
7 years agoReply
@ShadowBobcat10, Sure! When I'm on my computer next time, I'll suggest the edits =)
7 years agoReply
ShadowBobcat10
@Akaluv, :D
7 years agoReply
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