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三葉
今日才開始追故事,欲罷不能,非常精彩!
3 days ago
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黑犬風易
多謝支持!
3 days ago
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醉明月
突然覺得好槍彈辯駁feel🫢
2 months ago
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黑犬風易
有電影感係好事🥰
2 months ago
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櫻雪
係書店香港書區見到呢本書揮一揮手
5 months ago
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黑犬風易
多謝你話俾我知佢仲存在🥰🥰
5 months ago
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Sunny Lee
喺香港人的有聲書度聽到你的另外一幅作品flycation,睇到上癮。而家係咁以弱弱地支持你飲低糖朱古力奶。請繼續努力!
5 months ago
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黑犬風易
感謝支持!!!希望其他故事亦可帶俾你驚喜!
5 months ago
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Sunny Lee
@黑犬風易
,實撐你,我本身中文程度不高,不能給你具體的意見。不過想提議你注意休息,多去旅行,多閱讀。這樣可以充實自己,保持腦根靈活。靈感自然就會來。
5 months ago
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黑犬風易
@Sunny Lee
, 好啊!我都好想休息下!不過好快又有新故事,應該都要寫完先有得抖!
5 months ago
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Sidksij
嗯,匆匆翻過連外傳的五十餘章,悵然有感,我覺得哪,故事正文略嫌有過重說教意味,(flycation故尤甚)更多是剖析為文者的三觀,其三觀卻不見有何破格革新之處,故事情節推進講究行雲流水,把無助劇情進展的說話加插其中,便似急流湍灘之中放置幾塊大磐石,窒礙了作者行文的筆墨揮灑。換一個講法,何不把「人性的本質」這個作者渴求和讀者交流的大哉問融進故事裡頭,借不同角色之口和實際行動,把人面臨兩難抉擇時厲害關頭裡作出的表現赤裸裸的打進讀者的思緒裡呢?我想其衝擊性和入屋性應該遠教作者以第三身的壁上旁觀者身分大篇幅的曉以大義為高。當然啦,我也是一個不學無術的小混蛋,肚裡擠不出半點有質素的墨水,所以我又如何會不明白這需要為文者多少的嘔心瀝血和刻意求功經營?所以其實我也只是觀乎全文後好像忽然有所得著,隨便說說而已,說不好,也請大大別放心上,畢竟在網上能與萍水相逢之人結緣交心交流已經十分難得,因此我也實在不捨得放過這個機會。打了很多,是唐突了,感謝🙏
1 year ago
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黑犬風易
你的見解好好啊, 睇得出或者你係一個比我更有文化同見識嘅人。可以將主題同劇情完美融合,當然係我嘅最大目標, 但係奈何功力有限, 目前可以做到的, 就只係努力令劇情與大道理平衡, 盡力不做到偏重一邊, 只有說教, 沒有應有的劇情, 或令劇情失去吸引力。
我一直都有提醒自己點樣將故事同道理寫得更渾然天成, 我相信, 都係需要更多功力嘅。所以多謝你嘅意見, 我同意能在網上得到有誠意有心的評論已是相當難得, 他人大多是惡意批評, 哪會有人願意誠心誠意留下改進的意見呢?
所以雖然大家素未謀面, 但係都多謝你願意閱讀我嘅作品, 亦留下咁寶貴嘅意見, 希望將來嘅作品能夠再有進步 :)
1 year ago
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我一直都有提醒自己點樣將故事同道理寫得更渾然天成, 我相信, 都係需要更多功力嘅。所以多謝你嘅意見, 我同意能在網上得到有誠意有心的評論已是相當難得, 他人大多是惡意批評, 哪會有人願意誠心誠意留下改進的意見呢?
所以雖然大家素未謀面, 但係都多謝你願意閱讀我嘅作品, 亦留下咁寶貴嘅意見, 希望將來嘅作品能夠再有進步 :)