One thing I would suggest is to subtly weave character backstory in - and at the right time. Garen’s family history wasn’t exactly relevant to the events going on, and hints of it can be dropped in order to create a more “show, don’t tell” feel when necessary. Same for worldbuilding: the description of the bombs was necessary but could’ve been shortened and some details could be taken out, even if it doesn’t seem like it.
Other than that though, I liked the action in this chapter; excited for the next! ^-^
Other than that though, I liked the action in this chapter; excited for the next! ^-^