Tot's this story started as a fan fiction but then arched into its own story. the character i originally created for that fan fiction is still ages away to being introduced though
I just sent you a quick edit. One thing you might want to consider rewriting is that first description of how she looks. Maybe you can pepper in her physical appearance without having her stand in front of a mirror for it. Sometimes that approach can be seen as a cliche. Other than that, I'm really enjoying this so far!
Ok first off, I love the name for your main character (: My daughter is named Penelope and sometimes she's called Penny so you already won me over with that