I am not feeling that sense of urgency. I am not feeling the fear from those who were captured. I need that reality. I need what you'd actually sense and feel from someone who has just been abducted, where is it?
@shnuffeluv, I am sure that it will be. I am the same way when it comes to science fiction. I am not good in certain genres and so I rely on the comments of those writers who are. I love your plot.
This is my first time attempting to write a proper suspense. It takes time and effort, but I believe that I'm learning. It should get better from here!