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Lyanne
The hook at the end was good! 😊
The beginning few paragraphs can do with some work to give it better flow at presenting the scene.
6 years agoReply
Mastero
Thank you and yes, I agree that the beginning paragraphs need some adjusting. 
6 years agoReply
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