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突破口上的貓
感情債總是會來的🤭
5 months agoReply
楠都月
哈哈，的確：］
5 months agoReply
林谷龍
原來銀月早有所愛之人，是重情義的齊思，但他已有未婚妻璃了。這段愛情要怎麼發展下去？
6 months agoReply
楠都月
🥹🥹🥹🥹銀月對齊思的想法很複雜.......
6 months agoReply
小魚一尾
齊思發文：過去愛的跟現在愛的打起來了你死我活，求各位網友指教我該怎麼辦（不是
6 months agoReply
楠都月
哈哈，真的幫不了呢(X
6 months agoReply
霽客
這段情感與戰鬥交織得太精彩了！銀月內心的掙扎、齊思的矛盾，以及修女璃的介入，把三方關係緊緊拉扯，張力爆棚。戰鬥描寫依舊緊湊，天淵劍的威力、攻擊模式、默契與弱點交織，讓讀者感受到真實危險感。情感線也極具張力——過去的愛、齊思的未婚妻、銀月的猶豫，都在爆炸與危機中被推向高潮。結尾的救援瞬間，不僅保命，也把感情線留得懸而未決，令人欲罷不能。
如果想更緊湊，可以稍微壓縮銀月的內心自問，把焦點放在戰鬥與齊思的情感互動上，張力會更集中。
6 months agoReply
楠都月
的確，這樣做會好一點，不過也純粹因為我其實不太擅長寫戰鬥.....現在在努力研究怎樣寫得更好了( 
6 months agoReply
我為九斗米折腰
「齊思，我……」，妳倒是趕緊繼續說下去呀！點點點是怎樣？！！
6 months agoReply
楠都月
銀月: 剛好不用說下去了xd
6 months agoReply
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