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不知餘
王在隊伍中段應該是很正常⋯不需要特別強調前後。雖然知道是為了強調後面她有關心人民，但直接刪掉中間兩句也看得出來她有關心人民，還減少了一些違和感。
一般王走前，自然有身先士卒、自恃勇武、或其輕而無備的印象；王走後有懦弱無能或謹慎或被趕鴨子上架、不情不願、認為無危險等印象⋯個人認知是如此，希望大大不要介意。
16 hours agoReply
伏月生
當初設計這裡主要是也想呈現卑彌呼還不知道怎麼當王，他自然想關心人民，但又不像強勢的大名們有足夠底氣，但走在後面被保護著更不是卑彌呼所願。
16 hours agoReply
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