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沐紫藜
這篇有很明顯的青春回憶感，把不同年紀裡「喜歡一個人」的心情串起來，讀起來有淡淡的遺憾。
最後「每次喜歡一個人，我慢慢地了解到自己到底是一個怎樣的人」，讓故事從戀慕回到成長。

若之後修稿，可以再多加入一些具體畫面，像寫信、打電話、重逢或擋酒的片段，情緒會更有力量。另外「升高中後擋酒」這裡讀起來會稍微疑惑年紀與場合，補一句背景會更順。
謝謝大大的參加*\(^o^)/*
3 days agoReply
洛兒
謝謝你
3 days agoReply
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