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閒裡偷忙
版本a：「親愛的，我今天真的很累了，我們明早再說好嗎？」。「你根本不在乎我！」。那一刻，他只聽得到一陣耳鳴，以及心裡”牠”的嘶吼。

版本b：他拿起新的身份證，無視了她的欲言又止，徑直地朝著門口的陽光走去。

版本c：眼睛自己睜開，陌生的天花板，天才矇矇亮。眼角滑落的是解脫的感覺吧？
是吧？


我覺得版本a比較好，因為個人比較喜歡描述心理的感覺。
1 month agoReply
風上羊
你會有自己的作品創作嗎？
鼓勵你，試著寫看看，並在你的平台發表。
我會去看。
不過你依舊可以在這裡一起練習，一起精進。
1 month agoReply
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