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大秦書說人
文筆還不錯，沒有斷斷續續
在下想要指點一二的是，作者的故事是有主線的嗎？還是說都是日常？因為這樣看下來蘇某其實還是不太清楚這兩兄弟跟這個故事到底要講述什麼，基本上大部分的作品會有一個目標。不過作者如果自己心裡有目標就沒關係啦

4 months agoReply
皂玄AOPB
此作品還屬於鋪陳階段 主要的目標會在之後才會出現  感謝願意花時間閱讀並寫下評論 我會持續努力 

4 months agoReply
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