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Happy喵
前面我看得很迷糊，後面確實寫出意境來了。
有一段後面好像沒句號。

找了資料才發現曼珠沙華是彼岸花。
利用了趙凝瀕死的夢，加入彼岸花和蝴蝶等意象，令整體感覺往淒美上升華，只用這麼短的篇幅就能做到這效果已經相當不錯，有些難字我看不懂，扣分。

如果將夢境篇幅擴寫，加入大量動態畫面我會再加分。
7 months agoReply
朝花夕拾
欸對，應該給個前情提要比較好入戲～不過謝謝喵看出意境來了。
7 months agoReply
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