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Apart is one word in this instance. "I hope they did too" should be past tense like the others, with 'I hoped'. "First unfriendly individual I *could* find".
I'll admit I have trouble remembering Khaeso, so his death doesn't hit me perhaps the way it hit Marius. Maybe have him engage in a conversation with the others before his death? Perhaps include him in the previous chapters dragon joke, make it hurt more to see him fall.