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芙
有些贅字，例如周邊商品那個部分 手辦已經可以囊括公仔跟收藏品之類的了，周邊收藏品這幾個字大可不必。如果真的想講可以列舉幾個看過的番或遊戲讓大家知道這個人很喜歡就好了

再來就是進展感覺有點突兀，讓人比較沒有辦法帶入（當然也有可能是因為是戰爭小說），場景轉移的速度很快也沒有交代清楚那個地方是做什麼用的。例如喝血的那個部分就有點沒頭沒尾

比較想吐槽的是主角啊ww別人嘲諷個幾句就突然炸掉拿槍出來，不愧是三角洲部隊的男人啊⋯⋯為動漫老婆而戰（？）不過這是真的有點太扯了，讓人覺得主角個性很火爆

人物刻畫的部分還不錯，就是結合現代生活跟軍隊的概念，有時候蠻幽默的 這應該算我第一次看到比較硬派的軍事小說⋯⋯？因為平常幾乎不會接觸到這種東西的
1 week agoReply
大明
感謝._. 希望可以為全作評估



控制節奏比較困難,苦手._.
1 week agoReply
芙
@大明,有空會試試的
因為本人對軍事小說比較沒什麼感覺 
1 week agoReply
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