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紺野雪風
這部作品在結構和視角上確實不是為了常規閱讀設計的。妳的閲讀報告提供了一個很清晰且有意義的對照樣本，謝謝妳的回饋。
1 month agoReply
我家的倉鼠會後空翻哦
可能倉鼠半夜打字，有點口齒不清
這樣說吧，作品的敍事焦點太模糊，不能讓讀者有足夠線索抓取主線
形象化一點來說：
作品就像一個副本地圖，但眼前全是霧，讀者要跟着角色去探索解決主線任務，但走了兩步，還沒摸清環境就切到了下一個角色，而且切的超級快，進入不了狀態
這會讓讀者陷入了「我是誰」「我在哪」「我要幹嘛」這種雲裡霧裡的恍惚
能感覺出作者的世界觀很宏大，設定很用心
寫法也不像流水帳般漫無目的，所以感覺有點可惜了
1 month agoReply
沐紫藜
看到這裡，我再次佩服倉鼠大大了，真的很厲害！
1 month agoReply
我家的倉鼠會後空翻哦
嘿嘿嘿～這樣誇誇，倉鼠會囂張的
1 month agoReply
我家的倉鼠會後空翻哦
@紺野雪風
1 month agoReply
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