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紫玖島 sponsored 500coins for Issue 67!
7 months agoReply
此林不髏人
我覺得「拾級而上」沒問題，那是很普通的中文，高小至中學也有機會用到。

可以用四個字表達的事拆成十幾個字解釋反而像水分。
7 months agoReply
交響J
當然作者堅持使用拾級而上也是可的喔。我只是覺得目前作者描述沉浸感不足，才會建議寫白話一點。

所有意見都只是僅供參考，作者可以選擇不理會。我只是陳述我看完故事之後的心裏所想。
7 months agoReply
交響J
不過拾級而上這個成語的確是我孤陋寡聞了，我昨天第一次見，故而修改了心得，也謝謝你的指出
7 months agoReply
紫玖島
@交響J,不會不會，感謝給予明確的回饋心得，對於期待恐怖的您確實不足了，我會在修稿時重新審視，感謝指出🫶
7 months agoReply
紫玖島
謝謝您協助補充☺️
7 months agoReply
紫玖島
謝謝給予的建議～～
確實靈異的部分好像寫得不足！
會再去多方蒐集資訊，把描述補得更完整！
7 months agoReply
交響J
@紫玖島
7 months agoReply
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