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糖凌
守行的故事留在那個篇章呢？早上看到了！但一直還再想，看起來應該是妹妹去美國看女兒那橋段，故事不會不喜歡啦！都是用心寫來的怎麼可以不喜歡呢！😄😄😄

那段下文好像有提到，雖男主跟著她確不曾搭話，還為她打架。故事還沒有到核心，所以疑惑還很多，可能要繼續跟著故事走。所以目前先不評語唷～😄😄😄
9 years agoReply
守行
如果3個故事單獨來看，你可能一個都不喜歡，現在就看下篇能不能把疑點都解開！
9 years agoReply
糖凌
依女生的角度，我比較喜歡這一章，女主有愛有恨，但要表現出來(有一些作為),不光只是難過的哭而已，當然凌不知行守想設定的女主是什麼各性，但不論是什麼各性，被搶走愛人都會表現激動一點。
比方說:哭!因為忍不住在等紅綠燈時，都能在車陣裡嚎啕大哭等，很一般，但有表現出來才有情境讓人想像，知道她到底有多痛!
Sorry~你寫的是短篇，凌說多了別再意!😄😄😄
9 years agoReply
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