Haha thanks! It’s in the works right now (I’m not exactly sure if the scene entered here is gonna be in the final version; it was more of a first-draft thing). It’ll take some time, but I’m glad you’re excited :)

I'm glad you did. It was a good entry. Lots of emotion that I felt you described really well. We get a clear picture that the character is guilt ridden at their lack of control, and perhaps even a little fearful. Not much that I could offer in forms of improvement other than maybe comb through your sentences and polish up some of the stickier ones. Too many glue words can slow down the reading process. Other than that, this was a very solid piece. Great job! :)

@Jay Ellis, thank you! I’m glad you liked it! 

And yeah, sometimes i struggle with some sentences. Thanks for the feedback! ^-^

@Cheeto, You're very welcome. It was a very nice read. :)