I enjoyed reading your story. It is well paced and the dialogues are very intact. I liked how your dialogues - although they seemed like daily conversations - created some kind of suspense throughout the story. I will wait to find out why Kenny is leaving her!:) Btw, actually I wasn't sure about the part where Eru made Beth upset. What did Eru actually do? I am not sure if you have mentioned it in the story. Carry on!
That part of the story isn't going to be a huge part of Tremors, to be honest, because it happened during Ken's arc, but I do plan on looking at it more in Tremble (haha, somewhat shameless self-promotion).
»Slight spoiler alert: It has to do with Tommy. (I feel like I gave it all away, pretty much, but ah well.)
I'm so sorry; I forgot to ask! Is there anything specific you think I can improve on? I need all the help I can get, so any and all feedback is much appreciated. :)
Btw, actually I wasn't sure about the part where Eru made Beth upset. What did Eru actually do? I am not sure if you have mentioned it in the story.
Carry on!
That part of the story isn't going to be a huge part of Tremors, to be honest, because it happened during Ken's arc, but I do plan on looking at it more in Tremble (haha, somewhat shameless self-promotion).
»Slight spoiler alert: It has to do with Tommy. (I feel like I gave it all away, pretty much, but ah well.)