Thank you so much! I'm really glad you're enjoying it. (By the way, is there anything you think I could possibly improve upon? I'm going to go back and edit eventually, so I was just wondering if there was anything in particular that you think I could fix.)

@Aretice N. Treader, It's really no big deal! I really loved the entire aspect of your words :) 

I'm probably not the best writer to ask about what needs to be changed. I feel like any writer/writing is better than me, but I will do the best I can. So forgive me in the mean time!
Personally, I really like the way the story is structured. It really develops the characters personality that way, and I felt like I was able to concentrate more on what the characters were saying, and the dialogue was so well developed that it was easy, for me, to see how the characters felt. 
Although I can also see where there could be possible confusion. Rather than saying "Jon Doe said..." the story compensates that feature by adding bold, bold italics, italics, and plain text. As characters switch from chapter to chapter, and there may be more additional characters, it becomes a little more difficult to add more than 4-5 characters (although adding 4-5 characters may be a little ridiculous, as descriptions tend to get long anyway).
But that's my two cents! I hoped I helped! Again I'm probably not the most talented writer out there, but anything I can contribute I'll try my best. I really look forward to reading more of Tremors! I read in another comment that you were working on a normal layout for this story, so you can guarantee that I'll be there to read that as well! Thank you :)

@DabblePie, No, it's fine! I really do appreciate any and all feedback I get (even though I can't always find a way to incorporate everything in a specific story). Thank you for supporting me. :)