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十三郎(多媒體廢作人)
嘗試用擬聲製造氣氛，加強故事的急速緊張氣氛，會幻想到是個黑暗的環境被迫入窮途的狀態。
唯獨欠缺的是，一個可以讓讀者發掘下去的線索，就像探索油田，最少也可被讀者知道，原來這地底是有石油，讀者才會花時間去掘你的故事。
5 years agoReply
清流
電影鏡頭般的張力，能讀到有錢人倒地一刻的聲音和氣味，美妙的描寫
5 years agoReply
But
嗯……嗯？有嗎？
5 years agoReply
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