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素素
哇，我也好想有吃不胖的體質呵！：（

看來娶了太聰明的水中仙子後，主角會常常頭痛了，哈哈！

這次我猜杏子不會輕易答應，否則劇情太順利好像就不夠精彩了。

最後私心希望詩詩還有機會逆轉過來。
1 year agoReply
抱歉，最近比較忙，遲了看你的小說。

今集感覺劇情沒有明顯推進。希望不要介意我說，雖然齊人之福你每一個角色都描寫得很好，但論印象深刻的絕對不會夠單女主來的。

或許你可以嘗試吓寫單女主，可能寫得好好都唔定。

感覺你對於東亞歷史都比較熟悉，可以向你多多學習🙇🏻
1 year agoReply
覺非(Benny Chan)
你的看法很准, 我原先初次寫的時候, 整篇都是謝非, 蘇拉, 小鈴的對話, 連我自己都覺得太沉悶, 所以刪去不少內容(例如蘇拉的故事由親口說, 改為轉述, 省去近千字), 才安排到和談會議的開局.

東亞的歷史也是google而已, 我盡量希望真實一些.

故事發展至此, 好像回不到單女主的故事了, 目前預定給謝非的妻子, 最少已有六個, 看來要刪減一些, 變作情人但無法結婚才行. XD
1 year agoReply
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