@anonymousunicorn, Its a very rude story, but the details are good and gives you a hint of mystery. if you wrote like this but not in hate youd be a okay writer
@pee, I can cross you anytime....its you who shouldnt cross me...im not a god...but i always have back up and a killer punch...ill put you down like a fly on poison.
@pee,
Sorry for any mean comments that offended.
and if u say girlie one more time you will be an amber alert