I like the way your portray your characters. Pierce is interested in Thalassa, but he isn't completely infatuated or anything like that. And I like the way that Thalassa doesn't let Pierce continue with his sexist traditions. (I'm all for a lady who can fight, honestly.)
I noticed the same mistakes as before, so I won't explain them again. That gets really tedious, and it would probably get on your nerves. I'm not exactly sure what a sentence early in the chapter meant. Could you explain it to me? Here it is:
"You know very well that I much prepare helping you for the ball, Aeras."
I actually thought this chapter was pretty cute. I'm not sure why. Anyway, I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
I'm so glad you liked it. It took me a long time to create each characters..
Aeras had said that she'll help Thalassa to prepare for the ball. But since the younger Haskell has never been in one, she was used to helping her sister and not vise versa..
然後按「加至主畫面」
I noticed the same mistakes as before, so I won't explain them again. That gets really tedious, and it would probably get on your nerves. I'm not exactly sure what a sentence early in the chapter meant. Could you explain it to me? Here it is:
"You know very well that I much prepare helping you for the ball, Aeras."
I actually thought this chapter was pretty cute. I'm not sure why. Anyway, I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Aeras had said that she'll help Thalassa to prepare for the ball. But since the younger Haskell has never been in one, she was used to helping her sister and not vise versa..