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介鶴吉
請加句號，謝謝（x
一開始的幾個字我就大概知道走向了，你的“新”媽媽，就透露出結局（也可能是我看多了這種的
整篇可以直接用女兒的視角來撰寫，不一定要從爸爸的話中帶入故事。
以下是建議而已，你可以參考看看
兩句話用同一個角色來訴說，與先後順序的安排會帶給讀者不一樣的衝擊性：
我剪斷了煞車線。
不久，我就接到即將成為我母親的她的惡耗。

有些線索不用刻意特別去強調
用煞車線這三個字就能知道後續會出車禍！
這樣也能避免元素重複的疲倦感(｡•̀ᴗ-)✧
5 years agoReply
翩翩
好詳細的解說
感謝你🙏🙏
5 years agoReply
癇派 ⍢⃝و sponsored 100coins for Issue 5!
這個邪惡，我喜歡 (⁎⁍̴̛ᴗ⁍̴̛⁎)
感謝參加！
5 years agoReply
翩翩
謝謝喜歡🙏🙏
看似天真卻非常邪惡的小女孩😂😂
5 years agoReply
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