I liked how line 1 flows to line 2 with the same word 'wished' and how line 4 flows to line 5 with 'come' - I think it really suits the atmosphere, almost like a little girl looking at the night sky and talking to the stars...I liked the poem!
Thanks! It was mainly themed on a fairy tale dream that every child has, and having to grieve the lose of innocence while they grow up. Seems harsh now that i write it out like that... ;n; Thanks again!