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芙
大概看到第八章了～
優點大概就是文筆的部分吧，細節描寫得很到位、角色也很容易想像出大概長什麼樣子的，以及有參考歷史和文化來寫的皇子們、祭拜的部分也很帶感。個人很喜歡黑鷹首領是女性的這個設定。

我個人認為沒什麼缺點，真的要講可能解釋一開始登場人物就出現了好幾個，進展感覺有點快、讓人措手不及、以及前面分不太清楚女主角是誰（也有可能是個人問題啦，可能看到後面就懂了）可以再多一點角色對話、或是自言自語也可以，穿插在描述裡面可能會更生動～

以上是個人見解，因為本人經驗也沒有很豐富，就當吹風聽聽就好了

9 hours agoReply
飄呀飄的羽毛
謝謝分享～我文字跟角色都偏多，走燒腦路線的😆
9 hours agoReply
芙
總評可以在這裡講就好了！晚點來看
10 hours agoReply
飄呀飄的羽毛
謝謝🥰
10 hours agoReply
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