OH thanks for catching that! I had forgotten to change that! And Mae flower is a nickname that her mother gave her. Her real name is Mae Lynn, but her mother calls her Mae flower as in the May Flower.

Okay, a couple mistakes I thought were:

'Ash said dejectedly in' - I think 'said' should be 'sat'.

Also: "Sure Mae flower, what's on your mind?"
Why would Mae's mother use both parts of her name? They're close relatives, I think only 'Mae' would suffice.