I’ma just write this comment as I’m reading so you’re just gonna get my real-time reactions to stuff
— Helter-skelter is my new favorite word
—- “Merde.” Now that’s a word I haven’t heard in a long while. Back when I was writing SAPS b3, I’d have Kaori (now Cassian) swear in French and that would be his go-to word. “Merde” means “sh*t” right?
—- “œgh.” I love how that’s how the golem responds to Cassius
—- oh crap I forgot what Cataliszt and the others were up to… I’m guessing making a portal to escape the bandit place?
—- AW LOOK ANOTHER MARIE X CHAZ CRUMB. (I need to stop, I’m sorry)
—- I feel like Chief has some deep repressed trauma or thoughts or something. Idk just my hunch
—- I thought Chief was gonna do some waterboard torture on Chaz but I guess it’s the standard drowning punishment
—- shoop. I forgot what Bastion was. Hang on…
—- waitwaitwait where’s Nor and the other Peppermint Eyeglass folks? I hope they teleported safely…
—- YES Isaac is getting serious!
—- WAIT IT’S DONE? ALREADY? WHAT. HOW.
OK, shock aside, this was a ride and a half man and I can’t believe we’re already all the way through. I know book two is gonna take a heckin’ long time but I cannot wait for it. ^^
Oh good, I was worried someone would start singing the Beatles song XD
Also yes. Marie was so done, she skipped Quebec-swearing and went right to French-swearing (and yes, yes it does :P)
And yes X'D You wouldn't believe how long I spent trying to figure out what sound a flesh-golem would make.
And nah, they were trying to hold off Cassius... but clearly that didn't go to well. Tenshi was the sane one who decided to make the teleportation rune ^^
The crumbs never stop. This is good, because it contrasts their relationship which will never start (^-^)d
And I dunno. Some people just want to see the world burn. I guess I spent more time thinking about how the Chief acted, and less about why he acted that way.
And no, no torture. Very unprofessional. The Chief goes straight to murder.
And yup XD That's all, folks. I rewrote that ending an ungodly number of times. I had hints written, ending monologues, teasers, big reveals... but in the end, I decided simple was best and left it off there.
And thanks again for sticking with BRYZ this whole time ^^ You know I appreciate all the work you've done for it, but I'll say it again; Thanks a lot, Cheeto. You're the best (^-^)d
—- Wait there’s a Beatles song? OK i looked it up. I’ma start singing it to annoy you one day (maybe. Idk)
—- Yeah, that sounds Marie-like. I feel like her and Past-Kaori would get along, french and all. (Also yay, I still know all the French swears I learned)
—- Ohhh ok. It’s felt like so long since I read the last chapter so my brain’s foggy lol. Thanks for clarifying.
—- “which contrasts their relationship which will never start” Stop it. No. Stop.
—- Funny that he might wanna see the world burn while torturing Chaz with water.
—- Ahh, right. Chief doesn’t take prisoners.
—- “That’s all, folks.” Are you quoting that one Looney Toons actor? I forgot his name… I do like simple endings tho.
—- Aw. Bro, stop ;-; I’m gonna tear up But honestly, I’m grateful having helped with such a great book like this. I can’t wait to see what else we’ve got in store for this series ^^ (Which reminds me — is this book gonna disappear from Penana and go over onto Royal Road? I was curious(
@Cheeto, :) And I've got plenty more in store for BRYZ in the future, although I think the next "big" project might focus more on Alveus, we'll see. And yeah, eventually I'll move this over to Royal Road. For now, I'm just unlisting everything as I move it over, but when it's all moved, I might close my account. Not sure yet, tbh.
@The Yobanashi Girouette, Ohh cool. Considering Alveus and BRYZ are "technically" connected in some weird way, it does make sense to write that first. Also, it would be sad to see your account close, but it's your choice tbh and it's all cool whether you do or don't. Hyped for what's gonna come when you move to Royal Road though (I might just read as a guest over there, no actual account but just lurking and reading I guess)
@Cheeto, Yeah, they're deeply connected. It's gonna be revealed at sometime that Kage from Ghostwriter accidentally left the book of the world of Alveus in a Jim Mortons, where it got picked up by Isaac. He studied it relentlessly and used it as a base for his D&D campaigns, but when Kage secretly stole it back, he began to think he imagined the whole thing, and that it was his original creation :P
And that's fair. Lurking is a completely legitimate strategy :P It looks like Royal Road is pretty ritzy, they literally review everything you post, and can deny it and make you rewrite it :3 That's why I'm dribbling my content over, I'm waiting for approval.
Wha --- hey dude, you can't just spoil all of that! XD (But damn. A Jim Mortons started all of this stuff...)
Also I read "ritzy" as crazy and was worried for a split second lmao.
I think I know another site that does the same thing (review what you write). It's called inkitt or something; has a very odd reputation tbh. Makes sense to dribble over your content in the meantime; pretty sure BRYZ would get approved though. Good luck :)
@Cheeto, I mean, it's like spin-off spoilers, I can't put fantasy stuff like that in a sci-fi story :P
And interesting, haven't heard of Inkitt. "Odd reputation" doesn't sound encouraging tho X'D And fingers crossed that BRYZ gets approved. I'm gonna do some major editing first, though.
Yeah, I thought Inkitt was a really good place to go in case I had to migrate from Penana. Read about peoples' previous experiences with it, and uh.... I'd rather not even consider it anymore tbh (it also looks kinda dead overall). And hey, I'll cross my fingers with you lol. *You're reminding me I gotta go edit some things, thanks. Good luck editing BRYZ ^^*
— Helter-skelter is my new favorite word
—- “Merde.” Now that’s a word I haven’t heard in a long while. Back when I was writing SAPS b3, I’d have Kaori (now Cassian) swear in French and that would be his go-to word. “Merde” means “sh*t” right?
—- “œgh.” I love how that’s how the golem responds to Cassius
—- oh crap I forgot what Cataliszt and the others were up to… I’m guessing making a portal to escape the bandit place?
—- AW LOOK ANOTHER MARIE X CHAZ CRUMB. (I need to stop, I’m sorry)
—- I feel like Chief has some deep repressed trauma or thoughts or something. Idk just my hunch
—- I thought Chief was gonna do some waterboard torture on Chaz but I guess it’s the standard drowning punishment
—- shoop. I forgot what Bastion was. Hang on…
—- waitwaitwait where’s Nor and the other Peppermint Eyeglass folks? I hope they teleported safely…
—- YES Isaac is getting serious!
—- WAIT IT’S DONE? ALREADY? WHAT. HOW.
OK, shock aside, this was a ride and a half man and I can’t believe we’re already all the way through. I know book two is gonna take a heckin’ long time but I cannot wait for it. ^^
Also yes. Marie was so done, she skipped Quebec-swearing and went right to French-swearing (and yes, yes it does :P)
And yes X'D You wouldn't believe how long I spent trying to figure out what sound a flesh-golem would make.
And nah, they were trying to hold off Cassius... but clearly that didn't go to well. Tenshi was the sane one who decided to make the teleportation rune ^^
The crumbs never stop. This is good, because it contrasts their relationship which will never start (^-^)d
And I dunno. Some people just want to see the world burn. I guess I spent more time thinking about how the Chief acted, and less about why he acted that way.
And no, no torture. Very unprofessional. The Chief goes straight to murder.
And yup XD That's all, folks. I rewrote that ending an ungodly number of times. I had hints written, ending monologues, teasers, big reveals... but in the end, I decided simple was best and left it off there.
And thanks again for sticking with BRYZ this whole time ^^ You know I appreciate all the work you've done for it, but I'll say it again; Thanks a lot, Cheeto. You're the best (^-^)d
OK i looked it up. I’ma start singing it to annoy you one day (maybe. Idk)
—- Yeah, that sounds Marie-like. I feel like her and Past-Kaori would get along, french and all. (Also yay, I still know all the French swears I learned)
—- Ohhh ok. It’s felt like so long since I read the last chapter so my brain’s foggy lol. Thanks for clarifying.
—- “which contrasts their relationship which will never start” Stop it. No. Stop.
—- Funny that he might wanna see the world burn while torturing Chaz with water.
—- Ahh, right. Chief doesn’t take prisoners.
—- “That’s all, folks.” Are you quoting that one Looney Toons actor? I forgot his name… I do like simple endings tho.
—- Aw. Bro, stop ;-; I’m gonna tear up
But honestly, I’m grateful having helped with such a great book like this. I can’t wait to see what else we’ve got in store for this series ^^
(Which reminds me — is this book gonna disappear from Penana and go over onto Royal Road? I was curious(
And LMAO poor Charles is eternally Chaz now.
Also, it would be sad to see your account close, but it's your choice tbh and it's all cool whether you do or don't. Hyped for what's gonna come when you move to Royal Road though (I might just read as a guest over there, no actual account but just lurking and reading I guess)
Also yes. Charles is temporary, Chaz is forever.
And that's fair. Lurking is a completely legitimate strategy :P It looks like Royal Road is pretty ritzy, they literally review everything you post, and can deny it and make you rewrite it :3 That's why I'm dribbling my content over, I'm waiting for approval.
(But damn. A Jim Mortons started all of this stuff...)
Also I read "ritzy" as crazy and was worried for a split second lmao.
I think I know another site that does the same thing (review what you write). It's called inkitt or something; has a very odd reputation tbh.
Makes sense to dribble over your content in the meantime; pretty sure BRYZ would get approved though. Good luck :)
And interesting, haven't heard of Inkitt. "Odd reputation" doesn't sound encouraging tho X'D And fingers crossed that BRYZ gets approved. I'm gonna do some major editing first, though.
Yeah, I thought Inkitt was a really good place to go in case I had to migrate from Penana. Read about peoples' previous experiences with it, and uh.... I'd rather not even consider it anymore tbh (it also looks kinda dead overall).
And hey, I'll cross my fingers with you lol.
*You're reminding me I gotta go edit some things, thanks. Good luck editing BRYZ ^^*