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森月日下
简介看没懂，虚头巴脑，然后放人物设定，我知道你想让人理解你的角色，但网文不是这样写的。

是要在文中去呈现，人设、内外在设定，这都是剧情亮点，而不是直接亮出来，在网文这会直接掰掰，送去养猪场，。

文风轻小说，主角切入没有、人设没有、第一章角色太多、没有带入感，放在轻小说和网文都是不及格的❌

总结：养猪，文笔可以，但剧情呈现差，节奏慢，再去酝酿一下。
1 year agoReply
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