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祿思Luz
非常感謝大大的用心書評，讓人眼前一亮
我也看清我的問題所在。這本書確實是雙女主，我想要打造的是，讓讀者閱讀到後面才意識到...其實穿越者早就已經穿越了，而不是『碰！』來了！來了！穿越者來了！的感覺。
不過我也當真得考慮好好整理排序了。投射視角失焦確實是一個問題。
6 months agoReply
朝晞Ashinari
現在已經穿了嗎？我沒看出來ＸＤ
6 months agoReply
祿思Luz
@朝晞Ashinari , 對！XD 那我目前算是太成功於隱藏了 哈哈哈 沒有表露太多 (小透露：楊馨月 和 謝欣月 其實可以說是同一個人 穿越者不一定真的是穿越者，這本小說 我想玩一點點的哲學 主軸在自救) 所以我根本在搞死自己 我一個新手還敢玩這麼大(無語望天)
6 months agoReply
朝晞Ashinari
@祿思Luz,我也會寫實驗性作品，但讀者不一定會看得懂喔🤣
6 months agoReply
祿思Luz
@朝晞Ashinari , 我知道 所以我不敢有期待但又忍不住期待，相當矛盾🤣
6 months agoReply
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