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艾瑞卡(Erica)
不錯不錯！(≧▽≦)
但，有些地方會變成第一人稱，這樣不太好。
可以試著把小明的想法前面加個「他」
像似「他剛剛看電視裡的⋯⋯⋯⋯」之類的會比較好喔～！

寫作愉快！(≧▽≦)
7 years agoReply
陳綸
謝謝你😊
7 years agoReply
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