Varden and Catherine have good chemistry. The shaper lore and the murder plot look intriguing.
Regarding your writing, your flow is pretty good and has a good balance of dialogue, action and descriptions. I only saw a few small mistakes here and there (like "sparing" instead of "sparring"), but it isn't nothing than a simple edit can't fix.
Varden and Catherine have good chemistry. The shaper lore and the murder plot look intriguing.
Regarding your writing, your flow is pretty good and has a good balance of dialogue, action and descriptions. I only saw a few small mistakes here and there (like "sparing" instead of "sparring"), but it isn't nothing than a simple edit can't fix.