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Comments - 嚴格的 偽翻譯小說挑戰 | Penana
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有頭但可惜沒有收尾，這是一部長篇小說的開頭，但可惜的是沒有短篇小說的結尾。描述的很細膩，揭開兩軍的領導過去有著關係，但然後呢？……建議你可以在思考怎麼做結，一篇短篇小說的起承轉合你只做到前二者。
8 years agoReply
Cecilio Jay
應該會再修改吧……不知不覺總是長篇開頭改不過來了XD

8 years agoReply
Cecilio Jay
@Wendy，Dani，Brian 合格嗎XD
8 years agoReply
Wendy，Dani，Brian
有感覺，但還不到完全像是@@((龜毛
描述與用詞有些仍很像東方......不過還是合格ww
8 years agoReply
Cecilio Jay
@Wendy，Dani，Brian,好哦XDDD （有些翻譯也會採東方用詞啊…別太計較wwwww
8 years agoReply
Cecilio Jay
終於好了(喘
8 years agoReply
兀心
辛苦啦～
8 years agoReply
Cecilio Jay
@兀心,不會~
8 years agoReply
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