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Chat Noir
You really do not need to criticise EVERY single chapter I publish. If you need to criticise then do it on one chapter alone. Not every single one you read
8 years agoReply
Chat Noir
Excuse me. 
I don't honestly know how many times I have to repeat myself. If you don't like my way of writing or the plot of my story then don't read it
8 years agoReply
Lunassandra Hughes
I really don't like Camila's point of view. The informality in her character makes her appear immature and childish (also, I don't know how old they are all supposed to be). What's captain ball? I believe this is a writer-insert fic? I assume if it is, its written purely for the fun of it all which I can feel, but again, my opinions are all centered around my own preferences. I might be way off base? Also, it would be interesting to see the story from the other POVS again.


8 years agoReply
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