I have a little change to suggest; don't worry, I'm not trying to be rude. You say he's gotten desensitized to everything and that he's learned that emotions and talking are bad, and I thought that was established. But then you went and said that he'd get emotional really easily... It just made me a little confused is all. Well, hope that helps. :) Liked the story, by the way.
To people he don't know he is cold hearted. But with friends like the narrator of the story he reveals his emotions. She- the narrator can see through the "mask" he is wearing which is protecting himself from others. I hope this clarified it a bit.... But thank you for the comment! :)
@Doylex2, I edit it know. I hope its better know and doesn't cause any confusion anymore ^^. I would be glad if there is anything else which needs to be edited. So let me now please :) Yours
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She- the narrator can see through the "mask" he is wearing which is protecting himself from others.
I hope this clarified it a bit....
But thank you for the comment! :)
Let's see how I ad it
I edit it know.
I hope its better know and doesn't cause any confusion anymore ^^.
I would be glad if there is anything else which needs to be edited.
So let me now please :)
Yours
I am glad that you comment your suggestion!
Thank you :)