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北海沙丁魚
不知不覺就乾脆地看完了～

很喜歡你文字中那種真誠的脆弱感，句子方面意象也很新鮮（寂寞更加狂妄），情緒也是層層推進，而且很擅長反差詞彙（華而不實修飾糖果紙）。

押韻方面我倒不覺得有什麼問題，就是不知道有些排版是不是刻意擠在一起的（很難呼吸的感覺，如果是刻意的也沒關係）。

總而言之，是會讓人聯想到部分經驗的好詩～
請你繼續寫下去🫶😶‍🌫️
1 month agoReply
小羊
謝謝你 我會繼續努力的 也感謝主辦這次活動的大大 
1 month agoReply
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