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魔幻蕈菇
再看一次還是覺得好舒爽心情愉快💗💗💗
2 years agoReply
Tecchan
真的是流暢又好讀的小短篇！
2 years agoReply
Tecchan
純熟的敘事節奏跟逐漸堆疊的情慾，以及在適當時機結束的熱烈交纏，各方面來說都是一篇優秀的色文。娜妲的人物設定用簡單的篇幅便有讀者需要理解的資訊，鋪陳人物設定的過程也讓人會想要繼續讀下一段。在五感的描述上幾乎面面俱到，由於娜妲的特殊身分，似乎可以再多運用嗅覺描寫。從前戲到正戲都有足夠的鋪陳，性器的互動上有引導讀者情慾，該細膩的地方也有十足的描述，思緒跟情慾的連結也足夠強烈，心中有非常高的評價。
2 years agoReply
深海大鳳梨
薔薇跟撫子是我在蕉園閱讀肉文的啟蒙，在陳述還有劇情上受到很深的啟發還有影響，所以可以得到阿鐵還有魔菇的肯定讓我非常開心😭😭😭

這次的創挑寫的好愉快！我會記住這個節奏，希望在長篇故事上也可以有所進步，再次感謝阿鐵、蘿蔔、魔菇，還有其他蕉園的朋朋～～～

@Tecchan @魔幻蕈菇
2 years agoReply
Tecchan
@深海大鳳梨, 衝過去含的橋段太有趣了，我跟蘿蔔都很喜歡XD
2 years agoReply
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