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景曦
冒昧提議
可以多寫救或不救的拉鋸，感覺能更充分突出人物的色彩和彰顯戰場的英雄主義。
順道拿英雄主義作批判：這不是一個人的戰爭，而是大家的戰爭……之類
1 month agoReply
CF LAM
有想過, 主要是我功力不夠(我承認你比我強多了🫰👍)。

我怕寫得不好壞了節奏, 於是直接把陳強派了便當......之前在故事頭段還浪費了一點篇幅嘗試建立這個角色呢🙈🙈......

如果要後加, 也不是不可, 可能要留到日後寫到一定程度時, 再回來重頭翻修一次的時候吧!!
1 month agoReply
景曦
@CF LAM,偶然變奏一下也很好啊，不擔心！期待翻修的版本👍
1 month agoReply
星野維
沒想到在我寫草稿的時候居然更新，於是就跑來看了。😄😄
4 months agoReply
CF LAM
謝謝你一直的支持！！
4 months agoReply
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