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景曦
感謝大大的認真評價，獲益不少！
語法方面我十分同意大大的說法，確實受到粵語影響，明明已經很努力隱藏，但還是能看得出來。短文還好能靠反覆校對修正，但長文就沒轍了。XD
至於描寫詳略方面，問題大概源自於我的發文習慣。我習慣寫好初稿直接發文以縮短更新間隔，接著才花時間精修舊有內容，所以偶爾會有表現不穩定的情況。
克雷從來不吃蔬菜，雖然擁有龍族體質但說到底也是以人類形態生活，缺乏蔬菜纖維使他上廁所時拉不出來。大叫除了是太過用力的表現之外，可能也有痔瘡問題⋯⋯
6 months agoReply
嵐斕
很高興幫到妳！
克雷果然有痔瘡問題嗎！(⁠⊙⁠_⁠◎⁠)
6 months agoReply
嵐斕
@景曦
6 months agoReply
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