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靈貍莊缺看板娘
看完的感想是
嗯 作者會走一段艱辛的道路呢
2 years agoReply
迷茫者
我仍會繼續努力，感謝你的感想😄
2 years agoReply
鶄
有點抽象，加上故事描述得有點太直白了。

建議留點懸念，和描寫一個實體場面比較好，並用序章集中介紹時空背景和人物。
2 years agoReply
迷茫者
好的，以上幾點我收下了。

仍還在努力學習中，感謝你，提出的寶貴意見😄
2 years agoReply
鶄
@迷茫者, 加油
2 years agoReply
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