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練習做愛好出戲 不過真的寫得不錯
2 years agoReply
黃花魚
感謝喜歡～
2 years agoReply
夏坂Moonight sponsored 50coins for Issue 33!
抱歉，這是我錢包最後的零頭了。
2 years agoReply
黃花魚
謝謝～
2 years agoReply
夏坂Moonight
建議：如果想寫「常識崩壞／顛倒」的作品，可以讓「正常」的女主穿越，或是設置某種機制，從「純潔／未經世事」成長到「淫亂」，這樣情色感會比較容易出現。

就如同情色主要體現在「高潮前的積蓄」，而非「高潮本身」一樣，加油。
2 years agoReply
黃花魚
感謝建議～之後會修改一下～
2 years agoReply
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