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夜臨 Yalin Hayami
讀完了，老實說喔，你是不是藍髮控？禍離雪跟釉璃都是藍髮。
2 years agoReply
霞浪子
哈哈哈，被發現，我主控黑長直，但黑之後就是藍，主要喜歡這兩種髮色！
但實際上二次元的愛角幾乎都是紅與黑(夏娜、詩羽)
2 years agoReply
霞浪子
不過你居然發現到這細節，真的很厲害www
2 years agoReply
夜臨 Yalin Hayami
@霞浪子,禍離雪有圖片支援，釉璃則是剛好注意到ＸＤ
2 years agoReply
夜臨 Yalin Hayami
整體來說，我覺得寫得很棒。

會期待接下來哥老兄會得到哪些技能，又或者遇到哪些美少女、展開怎樣的冒險之類的。

硬要說的話，在場景的描述上可以再多一點，雖然知道地點，但對於該處的樣子與背景會有點模糊，這點調整一下後想必會增色不少。

大概是這個樣子。期待後續。
2 years agoReply
霞浪子
@夜臨,好！非常感謝夜臨大寶貴的意見！這些部分我後續多留意並試試看增述！




2 years agoReply
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